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Date: 11/05/2012 07:59 pm Title: Chapter 21

I suppose this couldn't have ended any other way. Anna wasn't suitable for marriage to a proper Victorian gentleman, even one as unconventional as Holmes. The very wildness that made her so attractive to him was bound to blow their romance to smithereens sooner or later. This is a very interesting and well-written story, even if I found it implausible in parts. Thank you for writing and sharing it. 

Author's Response: Thanks for sticking through to the end, and for all the time you've taken to review.

Author's Response: Thanks for sticking through to the end, and for all the time you've taken to review.

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Date: 11/05/2012 07:49 pm Title: Chapter 20

I thought Trevor was too short to reach the bottom of the ladder (chapter 16)? And Holmes may be too besotted to see Anna's lying about the "tiny push," but i'm not. No matter how this ends, it can't be good. 

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Date: 11/05/2012 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 19

I find it hard to believe a couple of Victorian gentlemen would have this conversation, but it's well-written, anyway. It's interesting to see SH as the victim of fate, rather than the master of it. 

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Date: 11/05/2012 07:27 pm Title: Chapter 18

I'm glad Holmes is realizing there's more to life than shagging Anna. This is another excellent sex scene. You're one of the best writers I've ever seen at them, amateur or professional. 

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Date: 11/05/2012 07:06 pm Title: Chapter 17

Wow, everybody's getting more dissolute by the minute! ;-) Is Mary being used as a vehicle of foreshadowing? 

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Date: 11/05/2012 06:58 pm Title: Chapter 16

Oh, come on. They're running for their lives, and they stop for oral sex and a long recounting of Anna's last two days? And nobody thought to look in the trees to see if Anna had climbed one? I'm still enjoying this, but that stuff is just silly.  

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Date: 11/05/2012 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 15

Poor Watson, getting jerked around by Holmes again. I hope the story he hears is worth his wait. 

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Date: 11/05/2012 06:21 pm Title: Chapter 14

This is very good. You're moving the story along and keeping my interest. 

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Date: 11/05/2012 07:03 am Title: Chapter 13

Things are developing very well. Now there's a new mystery to go with the original one about the paper.  

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Date: 11/05/2012 06:51 am Title: Chapter 12

I'm sure it's just a coincidence that when "Anna" feels herself in danger, she seduces Holmes to bind him to her even more tightly. Nonetheless, you write incredible sex scenes. That was magnificent. 

Author's Response: Anna responds to the adrenaline rush, and excitement is excitement...

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Date: 11/05/2012 06:25 am Title: Chapter 11

This is a good chapter that moves the plot along. Maybe Watson could arrange for Trevor to find out where Anna is, anonymously, of course. 

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Date: 11/05/2012 06:18 am Title: Chapter 10

Holmes is being too incompetent, to a degree that I don't think is accounted for by his recent illness. I also wish he'd quit apologizing to that horrible woman, though I understand he's thoroughly brainwashed by now. She's diabolically clever, the way she teases him, then gives phony apologies, then acts hurt when makes reasonable remarks, then teases him again. 

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Date: 11/05/2012 06:04 am Title: Chapter 9

I'm glad to see Watson is stepping up to protect his friend. He's handicapped, though, by being a gentleman because "Anna's" no lady. Maybe he could arrange an "accident" for her. I'm also wondering whether she has some grudge against Holmes and is taking this way to get revenge on him, or whether she's just a predator taking advantage of a vulnerable man. 

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Date: 11/04/2012 07:58 pm Title: Chapter 8

This is extremely well-written. I can certainly see uptight, prudish Holmes blaming himself for being taken advantage of by a predatory woman. Everybody knows women are innocent and asexual. Of course it's the man's fault if a woman puts her hands on him. He sounds like a typical sexual abuse victim. And kudos for getting in the historically accurate self-abuse reference. 

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Date: 11/04/2012 07:47 pm Title: Chapter 7

Watson used a chamber pot to bathe Holmes's face? Wouldn't he have used a basin instead? 

That "Anna" is a real sicko to take advantage of a seriously ill man like that. My opinion of her just plummeted. 

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Date: 11/04/2012 07:38 pm Title: Chapter 6

Now this is lovely. You do an excellent job of writing the tender, romantic side of Holmes. You're equally good at showing his embarrassment at the boundaries he's crossing and the vulnerability he's feeling. I like the way the relationship is developing slowly and believably. 

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Date: 11/04/2012 07:27 pm Title: Chapter 5

The story is progressing well. I don't think Mrs. Hudson is dumb enough to overlook another resident for five whole weeks, though. 

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Date: 11/04/2012 07:17 pm Title: Chapter 4

I'm disappointed the safe mystery was solved so easily. I'm also finding this story increasingly implausible. While I can believe a man might be so obsessed with a woman that he'd throw away the morality and propriety that had been pounded into his head since infancy, that obsession just hasn't been established in this case. Everybody says Holmes can't forget this woman, but assertions are not evidence. With Holmes more than any other character, the evidence must be on the page to back up the assertions, or the assertions are meaningless. 

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Date: 11/04/2012 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 3

Oh, good, the story is developing nicely. You're doing a fine job of pulling the threads together. I'm most intrigued by that business with the safe. 

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Date: 11/04/2012 04:36 pm Title: Chapter 2

So Holmes was poleaxed by her sex appeal, eh? Well, maybe. That's not misogyny, though, so I don't see why he calls it that. I've never believed Holmes was anti-woman, anyway. 

Now I'm wondering if Trevor is related to Victor Trevor, and Gregson is related to Tobias Gregson.  

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Date: 11/04/2012 04:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is a very interesting beginning. The language is off, but it's hard to imitate another author's style. That's particularly true when a modern person is trying to imitate Doyle's Victorian reticence. I'm currently rereading the Canon, so I'm more aware of this than usual. 

It was inexcusably bad manners for Holmes to refuse to shake a lady's hand. You'd better sell him as absolutely terrified out of his mind to justify it.  



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