liked thedialog, do i sense a love interest/
keep up the good work! do i smell romance between our heroine and james?
THIS WAS BLOODY WICKED BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!!It totally ROCKS! I haven't seen this story before since I am not very often at this site; I am for the most at fanfiction.Mugglenet.com. But, I must say, THIS IS THE STRONGEST 10 I have given for a LONG time!!!UPDATEEEEEEEEE,PLEASE!
if you want a medieval nerd to beta (bearing in mind that l don't do spellings) l'd be happy to look at the reat for you, me email is firstname.lastname@example.org
not bad, but l'm afraid your 1st reviewer is a medieval nerd, so brace yourself. first a scottish castle in the c13th would be unlikey to be more then a simple keep, but l'm prepared to let you off that one if we're in fantasy land, and even the lairds daughter would be highly unlikely to have a chamber to herself, she would have slept in the same room either as her parents or all of the other ladies, and drawers weren't invented. also slavery in europe was common only in italy, where the illegitimate children of slaves and their master acccounted for something like 75% of admissions to orphanges, most of the slaves were said to be young females from the balkans, and mad due to trauma. but as l said it depends how accurate you are trying to be, if were in fantasy land what the hell l can go with it
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I'm glad someone read it who knew...I wrote this when I was 13-ish and didn't really know anything about it. I was just sort of writing down a 'pretend', if you know what I mean, and it started out just being a fantasy-thing. It turned more medieval later, and I agonised over the very Disney-like time period, but changing it to make it accurate and appropriate would screw up the story no end, so I had to leave it. There's more stuff that just doesn't work, but I'm trying to modify it so it won't be so ridiculous that Disney looks like real-live renaissance (or who knows what period) beside it. *Not to put down Disney, it's great. ~Faeriequeen