You must login (register) to review.
Reviewer: snapeluvsme Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 05/31/2006 09:54 pm Title: As the Goddess wills

update soon!

Reviewer: EdgeOfDark Signed star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 04/14/2006 09:55 am Title: As the Goddess wills

Hello! Interesting beginning, and I found myself looking for more. This a very worldly and capable heroine, smart and brave. I like her. You need to build a bigger picture of the world around her. Having studied the Mediterranean, I was instantly able to transport myself into that time, and that place with Sabra, and see her world. The other readers are going to need help! Flesh out her world, discribe what she sees! I want to know how she feels about her place in it. “Lookie here boys,” one man snarled. “A little lost boy, all alone.” “I don’t want any trouble,” Sabra mumbled, grasping her ash walking stick tightly. “I don’t want any trouble,” Talk about Famous Last Words! Those those five words have started more trouble than any other words in history! I can hardly wait to see how Sabra dodges this bullet! Great effort Spearsister! Keep it up! EdgeOfDark ^_^

You must login (register) to review.