That was a beautiful look at reincarnation. I liked the way it sounds like some old country kind of man talking...the way he's waiting in that room, thinking and thinking until it's his time to move on. Very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you, I am glad you liked this piece... I had some reservations about posting it, but the fact that someone enjoyed it makes it worth the anxiety.
LOL...oh, that was great! Good poem, funny and insightful look at fandom. :-)
Author's Response: *laughs* Thank you, good to know it doesn't just crack me up!
WOW!!! I'm not sure I should have read that before bed! I should've known any tale you write is bound to be vivid, and OMG, this one surely was! It reminded me of creepy places I've seen, and the old folk-stories that just seem too weird not to be true. Okay, another cuppa tea and I'll settle enough to sleep without nightmares, I hope! The ending was so perfect, how very Tavington to just pull himself together like that! :-)
Author's Response: Thanks for the kind review! It was my first real foray into horror, and I had fun writing it!
“I know every language in the world except for English." -- LOL, that's what I laughed at... as he tells you in english that he doesn't speak english. Anyway, I liked this story. Kinda weird and silly and a little creepy all at once.
I agree with the previous reviewer about the complex family group designations, but I see your reasoning on using them. I think streamlining it would work... maybe taking out all those numbers? How many types and sub-types are likely to be included in the story? Maybe work something based on the characters that will be used, then imply further based on something else, or give an explination of what all the designation numbers mean (the basic fighter/monitor/domestic I get so far).
On the story, it's a little rough, but rough in a way that looks like a not-finished product, the bare bones of the plot I believe are good, and I'm moving on to the next chapters. I already have some feeling for the characters, so I think they're quite engaging in the first chapter introduction.
Author's Response: Thank you, RachelW! These are the kinds of reviews I love! ^_^
Things do get easier as far as designations and so forth later in the the story, as there is going to be a lot more interaction between our trio and other Companions. And you are right, it is the bare bones begining of the story. I wanted a kind of antiseptic feel in the beginning, then I'd move on to expanding the characters and the world they live in. I am really glad you reviewed my story! Thanks again!
It's like they're children all alone, trying their best, but really quite lost without their masters to tell them what to do and give them a purpose. They're very compelling characters, but at the same time very pitiable in their helplessness, though they're going to be learning quite a bit soon, I gather. This reminds me a bit of some of a Heinlein type coming-of-age story.
And the designations make a little more sense too now. Oh, and I'm wondering exactly what they look like. They're humanoid, and seem to have hair, eye, and skin tones like us, but I'm wondering about their ears... I'm imagining something horse-like almost with the swiveling? Anyway, I'm going to read the next chapter, then I'll be bummed to wait for updates. ;-)
Author's Response: Hi! The Companions are described in greater detail soon, but:
"I'm imagining something horse-like almost with the swiveling?"
Damn good guess! LOL!
Thank you for reading, and I am so glad you are enjoying it!
I'm highly intrigued about this story, and certainly want to read further updates. Are you planning on writing this out here, and then doing a rework of it to publish? This has potential, the characters are interresting, and the mystery of who/what the Guardians are, who the enemy is... lots of information yet to come, adventure and self-discovery. Looks like the kinds of sci-fi I like. :-)
Author's Response: Hi, RachelW! Thank you for the kind words! Yes, I am planning to finish this story here, then file off the rough edges for possible publication. I want to finish out all of my posted stories here, especially Sahjen of Ahnaad and For Now We are as Children. As far as updates are concerned, its going to be a little while, as I'm moving, but I'll be right back at it ^_^
As I have said before, these are the kinds of reviews I really like; readers who pick up details and faults and point them out, make life a lot better for a writer! ^_^
OMG!!!! THIS IS PERFECT!! I LOVE QUANTUM LEAP!!!!! You've got their characters down pat, and wow! *squee*
This is an amazing work so far. What's great for me is that I just read this last night and it's all fresh in my mind, so seeing it as String-theory-AU is really interresting, because that's what good AU is all about. A series of stories written on this AU twist could inspire a whole new line of "What if" where so few have to die...
Oh... oh... I feel like I need a moment to catch my breath and gather my thoughts. I've loved Quantum Leap for so long, watched it since I was a kid, and seeing this fic was just perfect. Like I said for the last chapter, I could actually see this fic becoming an AU turning point, with its own universe history and so forth.
I never got into Buffy at all, so that cuts out most of the cross-over fic that seems to be here... really great to see this. (And now I'm going to look forward to seeing who you are once the contest is over!)