I really liked this fic. I am loath to say it, but one of the things in Braveheart (quick, cover your mouth and suck in a breath) that totally got me was this very thing. How could this be okay? I am glad to see someone looking into it, and setting up a story that actually captures what the people who have to deal with this feel. I love your stuff, and this one is no different!
This'll probably be a long one--I tend to get fairly nit-picky when I review. =) Anyway, you've made an interesting choice of subject matter for this story. I'd read of the Droit de Seigneur before, and I've got to admit that I've wondered once in awhile what the brides involved must've been thinking. Your narrator seems to deal with it fairly well, for all that she's opposed to it. Her reactions--and Ian's--are believable and the the lord's disinterest is obvious. It seems as if his hands are every bit as tied as Evie's are. I'm a little confused about the use of "t'will" in a couple of places, though. "I must go and tell Ian. He t'will be relieved" and "This t'will be different, Mistress Aline said so" translate to "He it will be relieved" and "This it will be different", don't they? (There's a similar problem with "as though I t'were a bundle of twigs"; as far as I know, it translates to "as though I it were a bundle of twigs".) Also, when you mention "bans", that's a slightly incorrect spelling; the correct one in this context is "banns". Finally, the first sentence of your last paragraph should probably read "curled up against Ian and listening to his heartbeat". Outside of these little things, though, I thought that this story was very well-written and an enjoyable read. (By the way, the title particularly caught my eye because several years ago I named my violin "Annsachd". =))
Interesting. I, too, have followed you all the way to Chaos from Ashwinder. You see, I was in need of some good writing. ;-)
Interesting and well-written story! I liked the language and atmosphere.
Author's Response: Thanks! I don't usually write in that vein, it was an interesting exercise...i'm really glad you enjoyed it!
Being a huge fan of historical fiction, I simply adored this. You caught her character so well, slipping easily into her voice, and catching both her joy and her anxiousness all at once. At first I questioned why she would go so calmly, but as I read on her stoicism seemed far more suited to her, and her era. I love the terms of endearment - I often hear my parents use it (despite being Irish), and to see it used here was lovely.
I have a feeling I could become quite a fan of your work. You have an understanding of how a well placed word can make all the difference to a sentence, changing it from something simple to something beautiful. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Author's Response: *chuckle* you already read my other work, Daya! (over at Ashwinder...least, you've been leaving reviews!) But i am really really glad you enjoyed this. I have to admit, since i don't speak Gaelic, i was concerned that my research was flawed...so i was extremely happy to see it is actually used as a term of endearment! I'll be moving more of my stuff over as time goes on...but i have to admit, i don't usually write historical fic:) Thanks Again!